First Page Blogfest

I am super excited about today's blogfest.  It's hosted by Kelly Lyman over at Kelly's Compositions.  I know you're excited, too.  Admit it!  Admit it!

The following is the first page of my YA romantic sci-fi WIP:
            Hitting the ground was the hardest part.  Nine times out of ten, it was dirt or sand.  But all it took was that one time to be concrete, or worse, asphalt, to send even the most experienced into a panic.
            Bree’s feet slammed into cobblestone.  The crack of muskets reverberated through the alley where she’d landed.  The smell of gunpowder stung her nostrils.
            Are you serious?  1976, I can handle.  1776?  Not so much.
            Dang transporter had missed the target by over two centuries.  This was a new record.  Someone would pay for this when she got back.
            A fresh round of gunfire volleyed down the street.
            If she got back.
            Bree slipped behind an empty barrel and pulled out her com unit.  It flickered to life.  An address popped up.
            “3471 Woodman Way Estates
            Chincoteague Island, Virginia
            Deposit contents of package on Muffy Van Sloot’s grave with following message:  You shall never be forgotten.”
            So help me, if this is for a dead cat, heads will roll. 
            Bree was not taking a musket ball to the head for anyone’s precious purr baby.  At least she knew what state she was probably in.  Unless her transporter had flubbed that up, too.
            Without a sound, she pushed herself up to a crouch, preparing to dash to the entrance of the alley to get a better look at the battle raging around her.  Bree gripped her com and leaned forward, ready to lunge.  A digital beeping stopped her in her tracks.  It wasn’t her com unit.
            She peeked around the corner of the barrel.  Two teenagers, a boy and a girl, had slipped into the alley.  The girl held her cell phone up.
            “It’s mine,” she said to the boy.
            Bree glanced at her com unit as it registered and analyzed the cell phone’s ring tone.  Early twenty-first century.  Okay, so maybe the transporter wasn’t a complete idiot after all.
            So what the blazes was going on?


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28 comments:

  1. No! You can't stop there! No no no!

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  2. yeah wow - great start.
    Happy blogfest
    Happy Easter :)

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  3. OMGoodness. You so had me going with the Civil War bits and then "twist". Great job, I am really curious now.

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  4. I love the voice you've got going here! Bree sounds like one spunky kid, totally believable. I'm hooked! Would love to see this as a book!

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  5. The humor woven through totally makes this sing. Great work, Karen! Bree's a wonderful character and I can tell you're having the time of your life with her!

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  6. I loved this! I want to read on. Great job!

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  7. Love it! Your character has such a strong voice already, and there's a nice amount of action, plus good mystery to push the plot forward. I'd keep reading!

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  8. What a fun concept and a great beginning. I love it!

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  9. this was awesome! great hook!
    I wish i could read more

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  10. I adore time travel stories and this character has a great tone to her voice. LOVE it!

    Visit My Kingdom Anytime

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  11. I REALLY LIKED this, like A LOT!!!!!!!!!!! Fantastic writing! happy blogfest!

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  12. Oh, this sounds like an awesome story. I would LOVE to read more.

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  13. Great first page! You are an awesome writer, Karen. This sounds so interesting, and I loved the humor combined with action. Excellent job!

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  14. oh, nice premise! You had me hooked right from the first sentence to find out what the heck was going on! Great language too and the mc is a little cheeky. I like it!

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  15. I loved it. Did she land in the middle of a re-enactment?

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  16. That was really good Karen!! I was hooked and all ready to turn the page. :)

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  17. That is great. I like the first part in particular and the character. Very amusing and a good introduction to a time travel story. Well done.

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  18. I loved every single thing - give or take: dang, flubbed and blazes. These words jarred; they took perfect to a different place.

    I adored "purr baby" - it still makes me smile.

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  19. More. More. More! I love this. All of it: The writing, the MC - her voice, the twist, the story. All of it.

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  20. I love all of this! Especially the voice, I need to read more! Great job!

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  21. Thanks, everyone!! I almost backed out of this blogfest at the last minute, and I'm so glad I didn't. It's been a very encouraging day. I appreciate it!

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  22. I love this. The character seems to take all this as just another day while the reader is intrigued! I love the comment about the 21st Century!

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  23. Very intriguing - I want to read more.

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  24. I love the humor. The voice is great- very intriguing. I would totally turn the page. Thanks for participating!

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  25. Love it - the first sentence drew me in straight way! And I can't wait to read more.

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  26. There will be no naptime for anyone starting your novel, Karen. Any reader will be drawn into the feisty inner dialogue and crisis of Bree. I believe an agent will feel the same. Good luck in finding a great one.

    Come check out my first page. The protagonist was born in 1799 so his thoughts are couched in the purplish style of his youth not the crisp, no nonsense manner of today's culture. It is a purposeful foreshadowing of his clash with said culture to which he will not bend. He has lost too much : his humanity, his family, his wife -- he'll be damned if he loses his sense of self, too.

    Have a great weekend, Roland

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  27. This sounds really cool! And I love YA SciFi. That's what I write too. :) Can't wait to read more!

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  28. I was SO left wanting more! That was a great job. (I think our characters would get along very well.)

    Don't forget to sign up for Last Line Blogfest! (details on my site.)

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